by Rashers
This is a story that's not bad very erotic, but still needs something, but hopefully not bdsm, I think the next part or parts should be interesting.
I agree with the first comment. Looking forward to where this goes.
this story was so hot... It made me drop my pants and masterbate... It felt great... thank you..
This story is a load of BULLSHIT! Poorly written, PLEASE I BEG YOU DO NOT WRITE ANY MORE!!!!!!!!!!!
Only JOKING, it is a great story with scope for more.
Keep up the good work!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Having read hundreds of stories on Literotica I gotta say this is about the best work coming along in quite a while. Of course it might not satisfy those who are interested in wham-bam chronicles, but we're talking erotica here, and I think an erotica author is successful when he, with the clever choice of words and a convincing thread of events, can arouse the deepest eroticism in his readers and make them drool for more to come. Keep up the good work Rashers. A sequel to this story would be undoubtedly sensational but I also expect other creative explorations of yours.
Keen idea developing hope the early promise is sustained in future chapters especially as this young bloke grows in confidence (no pun!!!).
Made my cock so hard I stroked while @ work with possibilities of getting caught. Want more now.....
the storyline has great potential.Can't wait to see what happens next.
Your moderation, style of writing and dialogues made it believable.
Very good, very well written, and very funny. No commenter has mentioned that. You are a good writer.