All Comments on 'He Caught Me Looking!'

Great story, but a lot of punctuation errors and run-on sentences. There was also a lot of repetition early on. You should consider a proofreader or editor.

You write this as though you're gabbling away to a friend. This is a STORY - slow down, put in some punctuation, pay attention to writing style, make it expressive . . . you know . . . make an effort?

this was an incredibly hot story! did you say yes to the video? you should make a video and send it to be i would love to see you guys in action! plz send me a video soon i would ove to see you suck his cock !! email me: danyg311@gmail.com ill be waiting for ur video(:

Loved the story, very hot, wish it had been me!

I do agree with other comments that the story did lack a functional structure, but as a story from the heart of the writer it was wonderful.

If all you care about is sharing your dirty little exploits, then keep 'em cumming, otherwise, take your time, space out the action, avoid repetition and learn proper dialogue formatting. Otherwise, great!

I work at a gym and have fantasized about something like this happening to me. Great story. Thanks.

Loved it

Good stuff. I wish my encounter with a married neighbor had been this intense.

Loved it. I wish that I could meet someone like that and have the same experience with them. Want to have a hot guy make me suck his cock and cum in my mouth. I,ll swallow his load and enjoy it