- Gay Male
- He-wolf Ch. 03
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I nuzzled Alex's neck and smiled feeling him shiver. "Quit it mister or I'll have to spank you in front of everyone."
"I would love to see that." I heard Tyler say.
"Tyler go away jag get dressed please and bring me some sweats." Alex growled at me playfully.
I nodded and smacked Alex ass playfully and giggled going back into the room hearing Alex growl.
----Alex----
I chuckled and looked back at Preston crossing my arms over my chest.
"So what up dude why are you looking at me like that?" I asked smiling.
Preston chuckled and shook his head leaning against the wall. "What happened to the shy boy that came here a few days ago dude he can't stop smiling around you."
I smiled and looked down chuckling softly. "I honestly don't know but I'm glad he happy he had a hard life and I'm going to talk to him about everything today. I don't want him sad anymore and if I can help it I'm gunna keep him happy no matter what."
Preston smiled and patted my shoulder and smiled. "I'm glad you're making him happy. Oh yea Bruce wants to see Jagger and where all going to school after spring break on Monday"
"Okay I'll tell him now I'll see you later dude.'' I smiled and hugged him tightly then went back down stairs to see Jagger bending over to put on a pair of my boxers.
"Hey Al do you know where my clothes are I can't find any of them."
I smiled and walked over to him hugging him from behind. i kissed the side of his neck smiling at the small bruise I left on his neck nipping it softly. "Mmm I had them washed I don't like that they smelled like your mom and Bruce....I also find it so sexy seeing you wear my cloths."
Jagger smiled kissed me softly wrapping his arms around my neck as I still held him from behind.
I smiled and pulled away gently and walked to the dresser and put on some jeans and a tank top then grinned and handed him a pair of my old skinny jeans and a tight t-shirt. "Put that on for me and well go out back and hand out with Preston hunter and Bruce.....I thing hunter found his mate." I smiled softly and sat on the bed watching Jagger get dressed.
"Oh wow these fit perfectly....when where you so small?" he asked.
I laughed loudly throwing my head back. "Small? You could use something a bit better than that. We don't go through our first change till where 14 I was saving those for something....I can't remember what it was though."
I smiled as he sat on my lap and wrapped his arms around my neck and kissed me gently. "Can I have a piggy-back ride outside?"
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(so this is the end of chapter 3 I am working on chapter 4 but it will take a week or 2 since I drastically changed this chapter a lot I didn't have this planned but I do love what I changed it into there will be more mystical creatures in this story then I planned before but I really hope you love what I did if you guys don't then I won't do it but please tell me if I made a good change instead if a bad.
Much love,
Luca wolf)
- COMMENTS
BlowPopJover 3 years agoYou have a few grammatical errors throughout the story which could turn some people off and there were a few moments that kind of blurred together and didn't flow to well. Your editors should have caught them.
Leszoccer13over 8 years agoI like the story but have you thought about getting an editor to clean up some of the mistakes?
mjackso90over 9 years agoYour sentence structure is really what keeps it from flowing.... I also feel like I missed quite a bit. Keep writing you will get it!!!!!!!
Anonymousover 9 years agoLITTLE ONE . YOUR STORY IS GOOD ! BUT SWEETIE ! YOU MUST WRITE, RE-WRITE, AND RE-WRITE SOME MORE ON PAPER FIRST ! TO GET YOUR SENTENCE STRUCTURES AND PUNCTUATION AND GRAMMAR RIGHT. THEN YOU MUST READ AND RE-READ EVERYTHING ! TO GET THE FINAL PRODUCT PERFECT FIRST BEFORE YOU TYPE IT INTO HERE. HAVE SOMEONE READ OVER YOUR WORK ALSO. TO SEE IF YOUR STORY FLOWS AND IS WRITTEN WELL AND HAVE THEM DOUBLE CHECK YOUR EDITING ABILITIES. ALSO REMEMBER TO KEEP YOUR CORE STORY SOLID BEFORE YOU BRANCH OFF INTO ADDITIONAL CHARACTERS AND SETTINGS AND THEMES ! REMEMBER YOU WANT TO CAPTURE YOUR AUDIENCE WITH THE MAGIC OF YOUR WORLDS THAT YOU ENVISION AND WANT TO SHARE. BUT HOW CAN THEY BE SO ENRAPTURED AND ENGROSSED AND CARRIED AWAY BY YOUR TALENT. IF THE FLOW OF WHAT YOU WRITE KEEPS STUTTERING. DRAGGING THEM OUT OF THE EUPHORIA OF YOUR GREAT STORY. BY HAVING THEM READ AND RE-READ EVERY LINE AGAIN. JUST TO DECIPHER THE WORDING OF YOUR MESSED UP WORDS AND SENTENCE STRUCTURE. I HOPE THIS ADVICE HELPS YOU IN ANYWAY. THANK YOU ! OH !ONE MORE THING HAVE A GLOSSARY OF HOW TO PRONOUNCE AND SAY SOME YOUR NEW WORDS THAT YOU HAVE CREATED AND THE OLD ONES TOO. AS IT WOULD BE NICE IF OUR INTERNAL STORY TELLERS CAN PRONOUNCE THE WORDS CORRECTLY WITHOUT CHEWING US OUT FOR NOT FINDING OUT THE CORRECT PRONUNCIATION FOR THEM. I DON'T KNOW ABOUT YOURS, BUT MINE CAN GET AWFULLY PERSNICKETY IF I HAVE TO BREAK OUT A DICTIONARY AND INTERRUPT THE FLOW OF A GOOD STORY ! PHEW !
