by dragontatto
This is far too little information for a first chapter, and too spread out and disjointed for a prelude. You didn't spend enough time to show details on any of the individual parts to really develop a character.
It would have been better to simply fold it all into Chapter 1 if you were in a hurry to info-dump and start the story.
As mentioned, I'll continue another chapter or so in hopes that this disjointed ramble comes together, but if Ch. 1 is more of this, I'll drop from 3 stars to 1 and move on.
J
This story jumps around too much. The transition from one scene to another should be smoother. It feels as if we are missing important details.
If you can't be bothered with writing the narrative, why would I bother reading any more of this laundry list.
Pity because it seems like you might have been going somewhere.
It really bothered me how the work flowed. You jumped time about 5 different times..... It doesn't make sense to me.
First time I've ever been totally hooked on a story after only a single page on this site.
I'm not really sure. I'm kinda getting turned off by the disjointedness of it all.
this series starts somewhat disjointed but the story and characters are excellent. very enjoyable!!
STOP JUMPING AROUND, You have a great story so far just stop with the jumping
1) came upon this after it was finished, and
2) read the comments from the Fans
I've just read a couple chapters and have to agree
with the Fans..."Healer's Touch" is a well written,
interesting and very entertaining story.
Thanks "dragontatto"
I left my comment before I read Your list of stories. Thank You again. I hope this is as good as Magic Touch was.
Yay, finally. I cant wait for more. I loved the first series and I bet I will love this one more
Kat and Charles' turn :D Your short prelude is killing me lol, can't wait to read the next chapter!