All Comments on 'Heat, Stress, Burns, and Cuts Ch. 02'

I'm pretty late coming to this story but it's is captivating.

Dude, you SERIOUSLY need someone to proofread your work. "Heard" was misspelled throughout the entire thing and there were hoards of other grammar and typographical errors. I almost stopped reading right then and there.

I'm also starting to tire of the godlike character that you're building. No one human is ever perfect.

Also, you had a HUGE flaw with your hotel. When you added in the secret room and additional floor, you spoke about it being constructed in the 17th century. That means the 1600s. No where in the world were there any buildings in the world that tall. It would be the later part of the 1800s before buildings 10 stories and taller would be built. That's the 19th century if you are counting. 3/5 but it probably deserves a two.

I love the premise, but I cannot stand trying to read this. I do not understanding how such a creative mind cannot manage simple spelling and sentence structure.