All Comments on 'Hello Dahlia Ch. 04'

I certainly related to this story, as something quite similar occurred to me, great story.

Great story. Are you thinking of doing a follow up? Or maybe a short from Dahlia's perspective? It could be an interesting read. Just a small accuracy quibble; if the parents were of mennonite heritage, they wouldn't have had a mexican name. I still have relatives living in Chihuahua, and they're spanish is almost as bad as they're english.

Her decision makes some sense. Children do come first, although that can be unfortunate at times for relationships. The last letter from him is consistent from his perspective, but probably totally wrong from hers. When she was with him, there was almost no mention of the child other than to buy him a couple of presents. If she was thinking straight at the time, that would not have been a good time to leave the child alone with a housekeeper or anyone other than a parent. It sounds almost like a loving wives story, although they were never married

As to the story, I found the proportion of sex to be too much for this type of narrative.

. . . . I can relate to David as I have had something like this happen to me. Well written and well done!

Dahlia likely was threatened by the drug Cartel and ran for her life. Unless she has borderline personality disorder, that would be the only explanation for the quick change in her behavior.

I TRULY ENJOYED THE STORY BUT I AM SURE, THAT ALONG WITH A GREAT MANY OTHER READERS, THE ENDING WAS NOT ONE THAT I EXPECTED. UNFORTUNATELY, I EXPERIENCED A VERY SIMILAR RELATIONSHIP THAT ENDED IN EXACTLY THE SAME MANNER AND, ALTHOUGH EIGHT YEARS HAVE PASSED, I AM STILL DEVASTATED BY IT.

Sad ending!

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