All Comments on 'Helter Skelter'

Kind of reminds me of the Little Abner cartoon strip.

He should have used what Jack had made in a divorce.

Oh I was laughing at the end of this, nice story, well thought out

Well, this was just dumb. I've read some stinkers by this writer, and this one ranks right up there.

Sorry but I am confused. She cheat with Jack and a neighbor named Ed. catches him in bed with a wife named Sandy and uses the very same language that he used with Jack ? What the h--- is going on ?

Fkin stupid

Sucks to be Jim, guess he overthought his revenge?

Great ending. Wonderful twist.

Unfinished.

The ending was horrible,I thought the cheated husband was going to win back his manhood.The disrespect,betrayal the righteous revenge. Only to know Jack figured out who set him up.involve two married people for retaliation.Did the cheating wife knew about this? Is she that evil? The cheated husband doesn't win! Mr. Hard Day's Night take Helter Skelter and redo it over.Not demanding just asking politely please.

This was a real clunker, as reflected in the score. Either Jack was released from prison and contacted a not really contrite Gwen who conspired with Sandy and Ed to put this plan together; or it was purely coincidence, which is so unlikely as to be from the Twilight Zone or the Outer Limits, not erotic fantasy.

Great, all the way to the ending, where the bad guy wins.

De most mi lett a vége!? Így az egésznek semmi értelme,csak egy nagy nulla írás!' 1 csillag!

This is a funny story.

I can't decide if I hate it or love it - therefore only 4 stars.

But .... I do like the twist, when Jack was waiting for him at his home in the end.

What a fucking cluster fuck of a story not because parts weren't funny but the ending made literally no sense?

FTDS….!

4⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Just wanted a ‘complete ending’.

Yes; We can all guess - sure enjoyed the beginning, middle …. and ….

What a hypocritical prat. Two wrongs do not make it right.

Now that’s funny 😂🤣 5 stars ⭐️ ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

The story is good with much humor. I liked it till Sandy appeared but then it went crazy.

Hey, turnabouts fair play!

A burn the husband story, don’t see to many of those around here, good job HDK, you’ve got quite the imagination, and sense of humor. Your one of a kind, thank you. KS

He’s dreaming. Right? <grin>

You have a nasty sense of humor nice work

I think his wife set him up, since acted exactly like he did.

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Jack COULD have been a coincidence, but I think not, with him appearing on the exact weekend that his wife having the seminar that set up the tryst.

>>Sleeping with a woman is better than sleeping alone;

>>that is if she isn't sleeping with anyone else!

Your sense of humor is something else. 5 stars.

That is f...ing hilarious.

A.little harder to follow than the usual HDK work, but worth a second read.

Funny - 5*

That really was very good. It was different, took a new approach to the problem, and the ending was mighty dark. Good job.

That you are the best!

Cheaters deserve whatever they get

why did not divorce?

He has No plan....

Can't understand how anyone could think this was a good story,it doesn't even have an ending.

And wonderfull read, made my day!!!!!

I loved that his ideas all came to bite him in the butt. Sometimes, my problems come from attaching myself to the first person character, and , as he veers off the noble path, sometimes I am guilty of rejecting the idea that THIS IS JuST FICTION. But , as this is so masterful, I followed right along into his neighbors bedroom, and was as surprised as he was by the husband turning his revenge on him. Genius !

Still laughing! Great Story.

I like it. His wife should get a big laugh out of it.

Poor story,Jim deserves all he is going to get for not divorcing her straight away.

Another good, funny story from HDK.

Wouldn't think a parole violator, especially a weapons violation, would be out of jail.

Not worth printing

I know humor is your thing, but it never really worked.

I'm pretty sure you already read it but on the same subject I prefer whatdreamsmaycome's "The cage".

This was completely unfinished and not funny at all. As a matter of fact most of the time it felt like a bad joke.

I am a real fan of this author, funny, and you never know how his stories are going to end. Great story

One of this author's best.

As a fan of your work, this was a huge, HUGE disappointment. It's ruined my opinion of you as a writer slightly, and it's not a story I'd ever care to read again

Unfkrtunately not your usual effort.

I get going for a surprise twist but that stretches any logical boundary

What a dumb ending!

Why? 1*

What a stupid ending.

the script you used comes back to haunt your existence, TK U MLJ LV NV

The ending totally confuses any one tying to read this story.Was he set up?Where Ed and Jack mates.?

This one should be rated much higher.

.................Sandy Moore was introduced into the story and HDK's thought pattern went "Helter Skelter" and blew this story up for me.......but I enjoyed it up until Sandy materialized. :-(

He gave his wife hell when he caught her cheating then, did he FORGET! Then after he's caught jumps out the window breaks his shoulder, then that Fucker Jack (who happens not to be in jail) ask him a question and didn't shoot him? What's the point of this story? Was he dreaming or did he get stupid too? Or am supposed to be a mind reader since there's no ending to this story.

HDK is the master at ticking off the no-life, humorless, neckbearded eunuchs that infest the comment section as if it were their very life, which it probaly is!

5* for the laughs, the funny ending, and pissing off the wannabe cucks!

Really had a good chuckle at this one.

And a nice twist at the end.

I laughed early on, but this one turned a bit dark for my taste....

Still 4 stars for the clever bits and excellent writing....

Sucked

This bullshit you can eat

Didn't like this one-At-All. But then I didn't like the song either.

Don't be surprised if others think you a dickhead. End of story? Jack Sherwood raises a sawed-off shotgun and blasts Jim into eternity. Then Gwen walks up, joined by Ed and Sandy Moore. Ed says, "Let's retire to our house and the four of us establish our alibis. Your husband will no longer interfere in our swapping fun." By the way, Gwen being determined to have an STD was an extremely overlooked consequence of extramarital sex. Most affairs are revealed by a spouse contracting an STD...or being discovered and ratted out by children, family, friends, neighbors, coworkers, even strangers in a bar.

Hi there peoples! Truly I did not see that coming? PEOPLES please this is LITEROTICA expect the unexpected! Hey the wheels of the bus go round and round! Thanks again! Love you all! GREG. OH 100 % OF READING ENJOYMENT BYE.

I usually love you're writing but this one was a stinker at the end. What the hell ??

Did someone else come up with the ending or did you get tired of writing ?

Boooo ! Hiss ! You're so much better than that.

Didn't care for this one.

He shouldn't have done to Ed what was done to him.

Wasn't even funny at the end.

I should say WAS one of my favorite writers. I can't believe I wasted my time reading this. I may never read anything from HDK again. Really? Were you drunk on your ass when you wrote this. You say you think it's funny. Do you really think it is so funny to waste the time of your readers because I don't

This story was not particularly funny, or even amusing. Ironic, maybe but even then not a great example of irony. Is adultery ever funny? Is watching someone debase themselves and dishonor their family funny? Are train wrecks funny? The Brit comment is directed at this author because Europeans in general have a different view of fidelity, adultery and life in general. That is one of the reasons why European men are allowing their countries to be over run with rapists from the middle east. As far as the actual story goes, the plot took a sharp left and hit the wall at the end as if the author just wanted to end the story. It was a quick and cheap way to wrap it up. It certainly did not fit the rest of the story.

Not really.

First, I'll bet his wife set it up so that she could "catch" him, and Sandy got him drunk to take advantage of him.

Then, instead of having his wife catch him so that the ordeal can be over, you have the asshole (who he was SUPPOSED to be keeping tabs on!) turns up,and you leave us hanging as to what happens!

Only the closet cases, my friend, only the closet cases.

I laughed so hard at the end I almost spit beer on my monitor, 5 stars!

I have to say it's pretty funny, at least to me. (I just read it again.) Readers seem to take everything seriously. This was a story about irony. He was all upset when his wife cuckolded him, but he did the same to his neighbor. Payback is a bitch! This is not a true story and I am not a Brit, but I still like this story. I love the ending! That's all I have to say on that!

A fucked up story about fucked up people simply isn't my cup of tea. Most of the author's work I really like, this one though makes me want to demand a refund of the bit of my time and life I wasted reading it.

I laughed out loud. 5*****. Thanks. tom anon

Wow, what a shame. It was mostly pretty good up until the shit ending. It's like if you on a long trip and were almost at your destination but suddenly decided to go back home. A complete 180. Was going to be a 5, now it's a 1.

reminds me of something I might see on a Twilight Zone episode. Brilliant. Five stars.

this writer is. Or should I say Bull lover. This story absolutely sucks worse than any of his or hers that I have read. You aren't still writing, are you?

what the fuck was that?

the start was great and funny as hell, but then it rapidly went to shit.

1/5

Lovely plot, yes it does end a bit too soon, leaving lots to our imagination, of which some readers are a bit short of

Chilley

I thought the Sandy thing was a set-up by Gwen so that she could catch Jim and end the bs.

Funny how the things we force ourselves to tolerate change our boundaries. He forced himself to tolerate cheating and wound up cheating himself. The company you keep will affect your behavior, especially when it is a cheating wife. I have seen this before in marriages. Once the taboo is broken and not punished it becomes the new normal. I have seen spouses and children follow the bad example of a cheater and morph into pieces of shit.

Jack makes him suffer painfully before murdering him. Worthless human garbage like him don't deserve to live. If you stay with a cheating cunt, then you deserve to be cheated on, repeatedly. The only form of life lower than a cheater, is the worthless scum that makes excuses and apologizes for them. By staying, he is basically saying that her actions were ok, therefore, she should feel free to cheat again and again. He deserves nothing less.

What was Jack doing there?

Was he there for revenge?

Was Gwen there or was she still on her trip?

Was he there to fuck his wife again?

Who the hell do you think you are, Alfred Hitchcock?

First of your stories I really didn't like. The turn-around didn't make sense to me. It was way too contrived. I guess you were going for the shock value or something similar?

...I agree - fine story until he got fed up with beer. Ok, it was a setup. Nevertheless you turned him around - into a cheating asshole without guts. Letting Jack turn up at the end...oh well...we all make mistakes..Sorry..Usually you rate 4-5.

Okay, but interesting that he had no compunctions about ruining someone else's marriage after he had his ruined. Lost all concern for him at that point. That broke the tension in the plot and the reality dissolved.

right up to the point where he had beers with Sandy. Maybe the writer had a seizure and lost track of his thoughts.

I can't stop laughing!!

That's when I woke up. I don't know how I got home after all those beers, but I was.

When my wife got home that day, I told her I was moving back into OUR bedroom.

...what happened, KDK? I still cannot believe you wrote this one - had a bad day when writing it?

never forget the rules and the time limits, TK U MLJ LV NV

HDK very funny little rollercoaster of a story. Out of the frying pan, into the pot of boiling water!

piss poor

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No stars I see no reason or story here

I enjoyed this bit of fluff. Very funny

this

just stunk

but I don't get it. It made no sense. Was it supposed to humorous or some sort of morality tale about forgiveness and how one can fall? Just not a good effort at all.

...I just didn't believe it. It started good, but that ending sucked.

Very nicely creative and full of irony. Perhaps exagerated but still entertaining though not that amusing in the end.

...but not because I think DWMoron has any credulity.

I get it, and it is a little funny, but I just don't think that a person who was as intelligent, insightful and level-headed in his own crisis would all of a sudden forget his morals and prove that he is every bit as bad as the wife... in fact, worse.

Sort of a fun read, but it just didn't work for me. But thanks for writing, HDK, one day I'll get off my arse and contribute myself.

So I rated it 5*'s Read the story, loved it, but I just hate that fuck-wit. LOL

One has to think about it...but there was no collusion. Like Ohio said...there was two stories in one!

married 22 years so it is just a story about an old woman.