All Comments on 'Her Birthday Treat'

Thank you for your story, Minni. I found most of it to be very enjoyable. My main problem was the ATM action. Not a fan, and not convinced by those who say it doesn't have hazards, in addition to the ick factor. Otherwise, the action was good. It might have been nice to have more of her thoughts, emotions and reactions interspersed with the sexual description.

A lesser aggrivation were the elevator exposures. They came across as more petty than arousing. Perhaps it wouldn't gave seemed so if the men hadn't pulled that 'I too cool' walking off nonsense. What worked in the story was when they had a strong focus on her, so that felt a dickish move.

Your bit of back story was nicely done and just enough to get a feel for the who and what of the scene.