All Comments on 'Her Choice'

I am not sure why you chose to write in the second person here; you didn't do it in your earlier submissions. It rarely works except in extremely small doses -- it doesn't work here. Second person is just difficult to write with any flow.

This is an MFM not a MMF.

This was so bad that you were ashamed to.use actual names.

Second person and no names. You really aren't too good at even cuck stories.