All Comments on 'Her Control'

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JulianWinslowJulianWinslowover 6 years ago
Her Control

The slow sensual buildup of the seduction as you bring him to the height of pleasure is exquisitely done.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 3 years ago

Good premise.

But the third person narrative is not erotic.

One possibility would be to have constant dialog between them. Teasing him with words, not just visually, added to the physical would add a lot.

Three stars.

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