All Comments on 'Her First Female'

This story started out really good. As I kept on reading this story it got lamer and lamer. It had so many possibilities but it went nowhere. You should have proofread it first and you probably wouldn't have even sent it in. You would have seen what I am talking about. Not good at all

I concur with the other person who left a comment.

This story had so many opportunities to be really good especially when the two girls met at the club.

With Lynn was touching her theigh while they were sitting there I was hoping for a long slow seduction but was disappointed on how quickly it changed. It started out good but went into a dull ending.

Wish you could have done more with it