All Comments on 'Her Little Money Maker Pt. 01'

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Myrmidon69Myrmidon69almost 7 years ago
Room for improvement

A very sexy premise, but you skip over too many details for it to become really engaging. Don't be afraid to add more details and fill the story out more; it's not a race to the finish.

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