by AshureGreen
Too one sided. No doubt she tore his ass up and he was forced to go to the hospital for emergency surgery to stop the bleeding UGH!
Needs more build-up, more intro. One page isn't enough.
A pleasure to read a story that didn't sound like it was written by a 15 yo teenager!
Ignore the other anonymous trolls. This is a great story! A little more talk....maybe. Or a little more info on the finger play...maybe. As it is, it's one of the best stories I have read in awhile. The feelings she felt were as erotic as her taking his ass. It is obvious you spent some time writing and editing this story and the efforts paid off very well. Well done..