All Comments on 'Hide and Seek'

More please!

loved it...

Though there was a grammatical error..' you suck something hard' not hardly..

Other than that...

Hot hot hot..

Love

*L*

very promising start..don't worry much about d minor errors..although,it'd b great to get it edited b4 posting, u tell a good story in a easy n charming style.. So its k.

I agree with the other comments—there weren't too many mistakes and they weren't all that distracting; it helped to know that English is not your first language and I think people are much more forgiving when they know someone is trying hard with English :) good on you for being brave. I think perhaps the beginning of the story needed more context, just a setting of the scene or a location, a time of day. That helps to anchor readers, because throwing them in the deep end without a line can leave them confused and struggling. Overall, however, the story had fantastic raw passion, great emotion. I would love to see more of it :) I can see a plot in it that could be compelling :) great start! Keep it up :) and look into getting an editor.

CANT WAIT 4 NEXT ONE

I see... i see... an interesting storyline developing!

i really enjoyed this!

An interesting beginning, if a bit..abrupt. You might consider putting more setting information in next time. I was a bit confused for most of it as to what, exactly, was going on. I'm still not entirely sure, I just took a guess. You might also consider teaming up with an editor that is going to actually help you out with your grammatical and contextual errors since you don't speak English as a first language. The errors weren't terribly, by any means, but that's the job of an editor, to catch these mistakes and smooth them out with the author. Whoever edited for you failed. :-/ You certainly have a talent, I'm curious enough to come back and see how this storyline is going to pan out. You should absolutely keep writing, you will only improve with more experience.