All Comments on 'High School Scat Loves Ch. 01'

lol what the fuck did I just read

How did I manage to keep my boner reading this -.-

I really loved this story. Its great to see how kinky couples get together and share their fetishes. I need a new girlfriend.

Very Very nice Romantic Kinky Fantasay. Most arousing.-Eatandbemerry

Humdrum

Not too bad....maybe a little more filth with the shit in her pussy...but over all I came pretty good.

Unfortunately the story suffers from the lack of a spelling and grammar check, and of course the overuse, and wrong usage of an ellipsis. However that last one is common in loads of stories on here, which I guess is a bad habit being passed on.

The story is okay, but more detail at times would have been fitting, certainly after some of the characters conversations. This would mean not having to use capital letters for them, which is bad generally in literature. Caps in text normally mean yelling, and I doubt you meant your characters to be yelling at each other, right? Ask yourself which of these would be better to read? And note the change to one exclaimation mark.

"FUCK ME JIMMYYYYYY!!!!!!"

“Fuck me Jimmmmmyyy!” Stephanie screamed out so loudly the sound echoed back at them from the walls and ceiling.

Words paint the images your reader sees in their mind— so don’t skip on the painting.

-Guys' don't volunteer to be defecated on the first time they see a girl going. Also, if she did not go for 5 days, she would be constipated.

Scat sex can be a major turn-on for a lot of readers but this story is not very realistic but it did get me aroused

JUST MY SORT OF GIRL MMMMMMM