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by JBEdwards

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stratoblasterstratoblasteralmost 7 years ago
Good one!

You're writing tighter now. Work on varying the length of your sentences -- short, medium, and long when it's the right time. You're looking for music-like phrasing and only repeating sentence lengths when it's stylistically intentional.

I'm a golfer so I got a special kick out of this story. Thanks JB!

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