All Comments on 'Highsider Ch. 04'

The logic circuts in this story don't pass the reality test... Neither character is likeable... Nor would any of the story capture the essence of the catagory.

The "scatter gun" approach to a plot keeps it from gelling.

surprising finding her pregnant he didn't eliminate her, always throw out the trash

Stories about depoyed soldiers are almost always sad ones...3*

Respect

Four chapters were more like four completely different stories. With the exceptions of same names I see little or no cohesion in this story.

Wannabe writers should post in the non erotic section..

Jody will almost always get you!!!!!!

And despite the fact that there is a cheating wife in this story I feel it should have been posted in Non-erotic. Nothing likeable about any of the characters and it simply wasn't an enjoyable or entertaining read. You do realize that this is a PORN site, right? And drop the "true" stuff. No one believes you and it doesn't help the plot at all.

1 star.

this guy did not have a life, always deploying in a dead end field, never going to make it vin the real world. left his wife along for to long what do you expect to happen.

WTF are you still reading it for??? Gave it a 5 to help offset the asshole of LIT"s 1 vote I'm sure..

for a good read and a good LW story!!!

The facts are up there but the relationship with the wife is not clear.

Stories like this make me cry like fuckin' girl.

"I need to tell you that I am pregnant..." she began, as she saw the smile appear in my face she continued, "I don't know if you're the father."

Goodbye, then. If nothing else, this was the best part of the story. I wisht there might have been more meat to it, however. As much detail as there was of his deployment. When a spouse cheats, I take particular pleasure in their pain.

Oh, 5 stars.

An absentee marriage is difficult to understand; why bother? Wait till you can stay home and live like a married couple, not like you have a part-time or rent-a-spouse. And she was fucking around and got knocked up while living with his parents? The porch light was on, but obviously nobody was paying attention to who was where when with whom. Glad she found a man to act as a husband. Hope he finds a woman who can stand being a partial wife. Ann and him just weren't meant for each other. Mediocre marriages happen all the time. Why do you think we have such a high rate of divorce? Husband and wife. Its the easiest job in the world to get, and the hardest job in the world to do. I hope they all understand that the next time they apply for that job.

Thank you for writing about a very difficult and heart breaking issue. You did it OK, but keep practicing. You can do better.

It doesn't seem like much of a line, but in the context in which it was deployed, and particularly with the previous sentence... hats off. Suddenly, its overwhelmingly emotional. When the particular expands and becomes universal.

Good writing, I'll keep reading

eat it dog face

....rather than piecemeal. I'm comfortable doing so, because there simply wasn't anything worth chiding you for in the technical aspect, and the story was obviously much, much bigger than each chapter.

Well.

I have enjoyed every single moment spent reading these series. You are, in point of fact, a master story-teller. Your almost Hemingway style and the way you convey the home vs military culture is among the best I've seen.

Thank you for the whole and each of its parts. Please continue the rest of the saga, as you described in your forward recently.

And Thank You.

'nuf said.

dropped mine in gravel 3 years back and broke a thumb... pins suck.

adrenaline is a great thing, makes a wounded human capable of righting a 700# bike.

keep the stories coming!

RA

your writing about the war is a solid, full on mother fucking 5. Your writing about relationships is a variable 3-5. Thank you for your service to our country!

Find peace. Fine writing style, solid story line, good emotional connection. Take it lite, brother, semper fidelis.

All of 1* !!

At times I feel like this writer is trying to rid himself of demons by writing about his experiences. If that's what it is, I hope it works out for him. Other times, I wonder why

the focus is so much on war, when this is basically a site about sex. All that said, I'm

not sure if I like it or not. 3 Stars

This is FAN BLOODY TASTIC! STORY, My friend I was 7n a Hell Hole 1974 "Vietnam "MY SOLE , MY DREAMS , MY BROTHERS! We all died a little"a lot" for What!? The story is Fantastic! Love you all! GREG. OH 100 % OF READING ENJOYMENT BYE. Ps Every day my dreams and my memories make me die a little more Tell the Nit picking hecklers To go Fuck themselves

take a walk in a combat soldiers boots asshole, then i might take notice of your inane mouthing off -----aka mike has this nailed----- probably due to a time or two at the sharp end.

very good story 5 from me ---semper fi Mike

Not a a bad series at all. Once you get used to the writing style, it becomes a better read. Next up looks to be The Traject.

Good stuff.

Ann’s ending wasn’t a surprise, but almost cliche. Still, it’s excellent writing with a compelling story. The flashbacks work well, slowly settling the stage for something I haven’t figured out happening, before he meets Angie.

How sorry should we really feel for a cuck who forgives a woman for having a revenge fuck in response to a kiss, when the cheating whore cheats again?

I'm sorry they post your horrid, condescending comments.

A few small typos, having to adjust to the writing style, but overall a very valiant story about a very painful subject. Unfortunately there wasn't much doubt what Ann was going to do, she's lucky she didn't cause more casualties, if not by D himself, remember Angel is still out there. Signed: BTW

In 1973 (NAVY) a voluntary recall was put out for of all things Cooks. I answered the recall. My wouldn't go with me. We had two sons. I came home on a weekend as a surprise, arrived at about ! am and the surprise was on me. No one there. She stumbled in at 5 am asked where the boys were and she had dropped them off at my cousins for the weekend and proceeded to tell me the usual BS. She proudly she had been out all not with my brothers father-in-law he was 55 she was 24 Like I said, Me Two. THANKS FOR YOUR STORIES MIKE

left out wife. It should read my wife. thank you

Rambling all over the place

Well stated! If you haven’t seen it, you can’t really know!

I was a Naval fighter pilot in Nam. I got shot up pretty bad and my RIO didn't make it.

I knew, when I got home, everyone would have the natural question. What was it like.

I talked to the chaplain and advised that I sit everyone down and lay out my last mission in exquisite Detail. Took me a while-I cried a lot. Before I started I told them this was a one time deal. The could there questions and, after we were done I told them the subject was closed for eternity. My parents were in WW2. My mother was a nurse and my dad was on a tin can in some of worst battles in the Pacitic. His ship got hit by two Kamakazis. MY grandfather wss in WW 1 so, they really understood. My bothers and two other relatives didn't. They could only say terrible it must of been. 50 years later I still don't talk about it. Not because it's some secrete. I just don't want relieve some for someone who, try as they might, can't possibly understand. As an example it is impossible for a man to understand what a woman goes through in gestation and then labor and delivery. Not that we don't care. We simply can truly understand.

Damned whore. Always while we’re deployed.

Fantastic story!!! 5⭐️ stars!

An outstanding story. Anne's infidelity was a given since it was in LW but could just as easily been left out and the story wouuld not have been any worse for it. @ Anonymous 5 months ago; I served in the UK armed forces for nearly 20 years and never saw combat. What I know about the experience is that I could never truly understand because I wasn't there. My dad flew fighters in WW2 and my grandfather was a medic in WW1. Neither of them would talk about it. Bless all those who have served and are serving now. Crater7527.