All Comments on 'His and His Story'

Well that was the erotic literature equivalent of a flash bang grenade.

You should very carefully read your own story,or use an editor. There are a lot of mistakes in your story.

It's spelled "Grammar". Something about throwing stones and glass houses.

I think you could really have a good next chapter, if you describe these guys nude and get into the action. Also needs to be longer chapters two and a half pages, just to short. Only 2 stars for this one, but I really hope you will write a second one that could be 5 stars.

I liked the idea of exploring their first emotions and I applaud you for trying something different. I'm not one who believes that without sucking/fucking it cannot be a good story, and apparently you don't either. But it was too short and desperately needed a deeper examination of the feelings they had that would lead to such a quick hook-up.

Dissapointly SHORT