by mybaby
I agree with the first comment. Great start but ended too soon. I wish you had finished the background of the story, then forward to the present before you concluded chapter 1. However, like I said, it was a great start and definitely has my attention. I can't wait to see what happens next. Please don't make us wait long. :)
Has interesting possibilities though. I look forward to reading more. Has the makings of a very good story.