by Gregory_Andrews
What's the difference between a 4 star story and a 5 star story? The effort the author expends. The details they fuss over. The editing and re-editing. And while I really did enjoy your story, I think it's safe to say there wasn't a shit-ton of fussing and re-editing. And that's a shame, because the extra effort is the difference between good and great.
Loved this story but after a good build up, it got slightly rushed towards the end. Could of done with more of the HOT stuff! Overall, cracking story, looking forward to part 2!
This story was so hot had me going for a while the ending was very rushed though needed the detail the story started with! I would of loved to be in this situation!
Thank you for the feedback, I agree the ending was rushed but I do plan to go back and edit some very fun details. I was really limited on time at first but I do already have some fantasies made up, I just have to choose which ones to save for part two.
The story was good, started off great but when you got to the main sex I felt as if you rushed your was through it. The fast pace ruined all the excellent build up.
Your grammar is awful. It's laid there not layed there.