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LarryInSeattleLarryInSeattleover 13 years ago
"had"

You use the word, "had," over and over. It is not necessary. You can usuallay leave it out or replace by "have" or "were." Please get an editor.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Great idea. Fun story.

That was a creative idea for a story. I have enjoyed this series. I would like to know what happens next.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 13 years ago
Loved it!

I really really really enjoyed this story. :)

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