All Comments on 'Holly's Tale Ch. 01'

That started off so well. But what the shit?! Literally, shit. That was too gross, seriously. Plus, no actual fucking? What is up with that. It's erotica, not gross out novella. Also, massive lulz at losing ten pounds. If you're going to try to pretend to be female, a little more realism would help. Oh, and its LBS, not IBS. IBS is something very different. Try harder, kthx.