All Comments on 'Holy Fuck... Ch. 01'

This is dreadful. The dialogue is artificial beyond belief. The characterisation is flat.

Really this is just appallingly badly written

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I have my reasons for anonymity, but this is not at ALL a bad story. Well-written (if a little oddly formatted); I enjoyed it.

The style is the author's - I'd recognize it anywhere. So far as dialog and characterization being flat - well, anonymous must have just read his first Literotica posting if he thought THIS was deficient. Not the author's best - but better than any other I've read in today's offerings

I would say affirmatively that few authors here make any effort to set the scene, and I can't think of any off the top of my head who do it as well This is a story shot on location, if it were a movie; just about on all the others are shot on the back lot or inside the studio

Your stories are always memorable. Thank you for being a bright star in the sometimes lackluster pages of Literotica. You've managed to write a story that is tender, loving and tightly bound in a romantic context. At the same time, it is the best kind of erotica, a story that happens to have graphic sex, rather than graphic sex that happens to have a story. Thanks again for all the great reading material.

Great dialogue. Looking forward to the next chapter(s).

Thank fuck, Melanie and Sandy are back. Thanks for posting, I missed them so and I am so glad you have another story up. You are quite the talent.

I'm so glad you continued Sandy and Melanie's story. I love Sandy. I'd be his "dirty girl" any day. I hope this time around they can truly be a couple and find love with each other since that’s what they both seem to want. Please update soon.

This is a great story, very well written and nice romance to the story. Scotsman, you belong with the best writers on the site. Please keep contributing. We’ve missed you sorely.

Your stories have touched me so incredibly and I thank you for writing them. Fantastic plots, character development and cohesiveness between the stories. Please please please don't ever stop!!

The overall marks don't do justice to this nicely told story. Made me wet.