All Comments on 'Home Alone'

It started off pretty well and had the makings of a really good story. It was just a bit too fast, and a bit too short. But apart from that, well done.

Good start, but a little too fast. Keep writing :)

Short. Terse. (Almost) well written.

Like a telegram of the late 1800s and early 1900s.

Somewhat sterile, but convey some info.

The expanded version would be nice next time, please.

I can see that there will be more chapters. I liked the fast start up. Kepp writing you are doing great.

Nearly 18yo sister soon to have birthday. She has a box for her little sis.

Seemed rushed - but I also immediately saw the follow-on with the new 18 year old (in a few days).

(Rhetorical) Question: Why a 9" cock? While I agree that size matters, 9" is dangerous - and only possessed by a very few cursed individuals. Cursed? Only a few women are comfortable with that much! Be a little more realistic..................

Infantile!

Dialogue would make the story more human, less a report.

my sisiter and I started playing witheach other when I was 12 s and she was 10 with us finally fucking each other when I was 17 and she was 15. Fantastic

quick and hot. good dialogue and description. well done.

Great quick story. One pager with it all, a hot horny young cunt. a thick cock, sweet young cock sucker that swallows. I'll be right over.

Ok where does it go from here .... do they keep fucking each other do they fall in love ...does he cum in her an later she gets prego ? Let's us know ....this sound real

You can't be any more than 8 yrs old. Your "writing" proves that. Either that or you are seriously retarded. Go watch the Smurfs and jack off to that.

Geeesh! Kids these days.