All Comments on 'Home Runs'

A story about Rounders.

Rushed.

Way too rushed. The story was good but anorexic, definitely needs to be filled in more but looking to see how you improve on the next one.

"You have the best body and dick of any man I have ever been with." Lily gives an impassioned comment on her lovemaking! Give Ethan some sexy hair for that great chest -- Lily will love stroking that chest!

Many people misuse the transitive form for the intransitive in casual conversation or quoted dialogue as you do when Lily says, "Lay down." It's conventional & that’s okay. But in the narrative, it's better to know the the difference - switch laid to lay. Still love ur work. Realize now that I have read this before our email connection. Do agree with anon comment that it's a bit rushed. But that's probably because you seem to be prolific - a lot of work submitted in such a short time on Literotica, impressive. This story along with Dr & Nurse beg for follow-ups. Kudos!