All Comments on 'Homecoming'

as usual you don't disapoint. i really hope there will be more of this one. maybe one more chapter, maybe the cops are there cuz he's naked i hope she doesn't turn him in. i mean i was getting the impression she was fine with him now i mean he even cleaned up for her. i have a feeling this is going to be goood please continue this one :-)

You set the stage well with minimal information. You gave us a realistic rape scene. I t was good to have her NOT get all wet and slutty over his magical cock. You had me worried there about her actions, then-bam! I loved, loved, loved the ending. Too rarely that happens. Please leave it as it is.

5* as it stands.

Seriously, the end rocks! But I hope it goes on, I mean it was sweet that the homeless guy wanted a wife. But the second part was completely un realistic. After the shower I mean. But keep writing, really enjoyed it!

Well! Thanks! And let me respond. I don't think that women who have been raped like it, ever. I do think that women don't get enough credit for what they bring to relationships so I try to write occasionally as if they are at least equal mental, and frequently, physical partners. Now, you have left me in a quandary. Is there another chapter to this story? I think not. He may have been homeless, but that in and of itself doesn't make him a sympathetic character. He did take violent advantage of her when she was vulnerable. That makes him a criminal. Let's just leave him in prison. He may be reformed at some point. (I actually work with recently released prisoners.) However, let's move on. The conclusion to Five Bright Smiles will be released within a week. There will be a book on Amazon around Memorial Day. The author is Charles Rutherford McMillan, Esq. You may recognize his writing and enjoy the stories.

It might have been a 5 star, before the improbable idea o

f a night like wife and husband.

The successive police ending is more credible, instead.