by Palistus
I am not usually one to criticise an author about spelling and grammar as I am not too strong in that area myself. However, I would strongly recommend that you find someone to, at least, read through and check your work before you submit it for publication here.
I really enjoyed your story. But sadly, the flow of your excellent storytelling was disrupted several times by the silly spelling, grammar and typographical errors that got left in the final typescript.
3* for good storytelling at least :-)
Tom D
Yeah, yeah, spelling, grammar, whatever (Thomas). I didn't even notice anything like that. What I did notice was that this was a very tender, emotional story. Keep 'em coming.
I really hope you continue.
I just have one comment , it's about the mythical internal barrier....
The hymen is on the outside and fairly easy to 'rub' away....