by oceaneyes22
I am really enjoying your creation. I love how the story is unfolding, and wonder where it will lead for our soon to be mated pair.
you are badly in need of an editor ,the bad grammar and missing words really slows down the reading .Since you made a big deal out of her trying the food, it would have been great if she explained what everything tasted like ......just saying.
The story is great ! Different ,and refreshing . Thanks for sharing it with us .
Stephen J
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