by Mariesugar
This had nothing to do with romance - should have been in 'Erotic Couplings'.
If this story ends here, it is badly placed, it should go in erotic couples. Now if it's the first chapter of a saga, in which Mike separates from Amy and Becky joins him as a couple, he could stay here in Romance, as long as it's a romantic story and not just lust and sex.
Anyway, the story seems to be fine, a little too hot (if it's a first chapter), but with possibilities if the author is willing to continue it.
That's why I give 5 *, in the confidence that it will do what some of us have commented.
I apologize for my English (yet), is not my native language.
no romance in this tale. just a dreaming husband wanting to cheat. dream on.
If only you could explain what happened to your daughters, while you were making out and screaming. You wouldn't allow your girls to be exposed to marital discord, so, you wouldn't obviously let them hear you fucking their sitter? I was thinking of this the whole time and couldn't enjoy the later part of your story.
Story needs proof reading - quite few errors, including giving the girls a "both" not a bath.
Biggest flaw for me has also been pointed out by others, the amazingly convenient disapperance of the two kids! This reduces the story to a mere fantasy.
Not a romance, ok, and a few typing mistakes, but an efficient "erotic coupling".
Nice first try.
Can be improved with more attention to secondary characters, the girls here.
Go on, just post it in the right category to skip the "never happy" complainers.
this is a cheater "loving wives" story. WOW i hope the bastard gets caught, loses all rights and gets taken to the cleaners for EVERYTHING. what a scum of the earth piece of shit...
This is a cheating spouse story. There is sex but no romance. It's an ok story.
Maybe his wife was getting some extra, too, and didn't want to leave it. The girl took good care of his children, kept them clean and fed them well. Too bad he wouldn't have put one in her tummy to go with the other two, and his wife could stay where she was. I know it's a story, but what mother would leave her children for a whole week or two...