All Comments on 'Hot Wife Initiation'

And now for the rest of the story.....

Is this all? If it is it was a complete waste of time!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! On the assumption that this was the whole story, since there was no chapter # or anything else suggesting the contrary, I'm giving this 1 star and wish I could give it fewer. I don't understand why people would even post such a ridiculous piece of crap!

put IR trash in IR

Sorry, I just can't see it. Hot 38 yr old letting 64 yr old lady take pictures and fuck her with a dildo? I know it's probably a set up for beng gangbanged later by first their husbands and then who ever wants too but as I said I can't see a woman being that retarded not to see what's coming.

Maybe if the domination was a little more subtle initially ?

placing everything very carefully so that it could imply her "supposed" infidelity,.

On the other hand: Not much of a story here, just a few sentences, written in perhaps half an hour. Wifelvrman, I am sure you can do better..

So the wife will do all this to join a country club just like that?no resistance? Just does all that and more?I don't know what women you have known,but this is pretty. bad

rubbish

Waste of time.

Simple request: Finish The Dam Story

I thought it was good but short.

Ridiculous story. Where is the Loving Wife part? The back of the dress bare to the waist but she's wearing a bra, at a country club restaurant. Even more ridiculous.

garbage

Keep the story going. It is hot and has a ton of potential.

1*

Agree with the bra/backless sundress wardrobe malfunction!

So the golf pro gets his, the lawn mower guys get theirs, the over 18 caddies get theirs and the rich old farts get theirs? Then the lesbian old cunts get theirs? OK same old shit.

New category needed just for cuckold crap outside of loving wives.

This sure doesn't fit my definition of a "story". Maybe the beginning of one. A bad one.

What, are these women in third grade? Even if this is the beginning you need to rethink what is going to happen.

not much story however

Bullying in any form or at any age is a turn off.

Stupid story.

There's no cheating or anything, just sexy teasing and fun. Love this story, though it was a bit short. Hope there's a part two.

So good. Not sure where your going with it. Hope you finish it.

But you pushed the pace a little too fast for my likes. I would have preferred to have read more about how Jenna felt at each step. Was she embarrassed, humiliated, turned on? Why was it so important that she join this club? Was it worth what they were doing? Take a bit more time and tease the reader a bit more. With this much material the story should have been at least twice as long. Also find an editor to help you craft some dialog and get your grammar cleaned up.

Lots of potential here, I'm looking forward to seeing how this develops. If it's anything like the author's other stories it will get better and better with every chapter. I'm a fan!

Not enough information. Who knows why anyone is acting the way they are. Nothing compelling or interesting in this short bit.

it moved so fast without any real insight into anything relevant. Slow down and tell us a story as if we were sitting in front of you listening.......

Why is only the wife having to do things to get into the club? They should have led her to a glory hole booth in back and directed her to suck off and swallow loads from six strangers. Then had her fuck three more strangers with full creampies. And took pictures of that.

Country club? Wasn't just a whorehouse? 1*

good story and effort.

VOTE 1* FOR EVERY STORY RATED BY THAT FAT DUMB WHORE VASTIESMITH2 AKA BONNIETAYLOR2 AKA ANON!

Started good but went sour in a hurry.88A488A4

That's the dumbest thing ever written! Hell, she puts the videos in her drawer? She watches them while her husband is in the house? I give her 3 days tops before her husband has video, she's out on her ass and the Country Club is in deep shit.

1 star

Wifliverman with another story about a whore.