All Comments on 'Hotel Theme Park'

I liked the story, but had some trouble with it. You should let someone edit it for you to make it easier to read. I edit and would be happy to help. Keep writing.

thanx for feedback robdogh. I would try to make the upcoming stories more user friendly.

I like it, very detailed and interesting. Overall a great story and one that I will probably read again sometime. You should do another story between Jason and Alicia, maybe a series. I give it a 10/10

It was a good story but maybe don't leave it off so suddenly, for example what happened with the prize for winning that the announcer had talked about. You could make it a vacation for the 2 winners and have it be Kevin and Alicia and continue the story in that way. Also it wasn't that frequent but the grammar could do with some work. Overall a pretty good story just tie up the loose ends.

Terrible writing. No one talks like that.