All Comments on 'Hot Springs in the Mountains'

Paragraphs. Read up about them. Practice them, then use them. They make it easier for readers to read the stuff you want them to read. I couldn't (be bothered to) read this story.

I disagree with anonymous. Perhaps paragraphs would have been easier to read, but this way felt like a poem instead. I enjoyed this moment with ease. Thanks for sharing

a romantic setting and 2 lovely partners,\\ TK U MLJ LV NV

Thank you! I generally write without a title, short description or tags in mind (and when I do start with those, the story often ends up departing from my original plans), and then I struggle to come up with good ones. Those are perfect! I'll see if I can change them without completely resubmitting.