by _Lynn_
The flow of the story was excellent taking the two into the different states of fear. The ease of which Zack succumed, thought Lisa could have been controlled a bit more or seduced in a more dungeon like atmosphere but all in all very good.
I tried to skim through the story but had to go back and read every word to find out what was happening. I actually felt bad for the couple a couple of times. Good thing they won't be remembering anything. Creepy!
Nice Job Lynn, Good luck in the contest.
DG Hear
Really well done Lynn! Makes you wonder if it's going to be tried. A real "Through the Looking Glass" adventure. Nice touch with the memory loss to cover it up.
Wow, this was really freaky imagery. Very well done!
Good luck in the contest!
A well conceived and executed departure from an excellent writer of Romances. Terrific imagery and mood setting. Good luck in the contest.
A quintessential erotic horror story that blends the two elements together seamlessly. Good job Lynn. Nice to see you working well, outside your comfort zone.
Fantastic. I once again see why you are one of my favorite writers of all times. Beautiful.
It's the first "contest" story I've ever read. I picked a good one I think. You know what I really liked? It was the way Zach and Lisa related to each other. I've seen couples just exactly like that, the wife planning the fun, the husband grudgingly going along, and in the end, everything was good. You had me wondering just how far things were going to go for them...and that ending. What a surprise. Nice. I'm glad you put this together.
Leto
... I enjoyed the read. A lighter frolic than the usual fare hereabouts. You show promise as a writer stretching the imaginations of your readers. Keep up the good work.