All Comments on 'How Could I Resist? Ch. 01'

think they got on the elevator a few too many times, entered the room a couple of times and the names of the girls with each guy changed a couple of times. Perhaps a proof read, an editor, or something a little less confusing! Hard to read this as is.

A wonderful story, but some of the spelling errors (a vice is a bad habit, not the experience of being in a woman) and some of the grammar was distracting. Great fantasy, otherwise!

Desperately needs an editor - but I 'm not sure the patient can be saved. Story line is fine but poorly presented. Start with a good editor and see what can be done from there

There is much right with this story. There are also some problems.

For me, stress on the "for me," it was unnecessarily long. Detail is good, but you need to get to it. Setting the "hook" in the first couple of paragraphs is important.

Proof reading; its difficult to proof read your own work. Homonyms are killer.

A good editor, which oft translates to brutal, is of paramount importance.

And writing. And writing. While practice doesn't make perfect, it makes your work improve with every effort. That is if you want it to improve.

Looking forward to your future work.