All Comments on 'How I Became a Porn Star Ch. 01'

was not bad, the realization was short and heartless, matter of fack, like in a cheap porn-flick. but this is writing you have no images besides the ones you are able to create in a readers brain. and this is not enough to be good.

I think there are some rough edges which should have been honed and the girl seems to have the IQ of Forrest Gump, but hey its fantasy, and a damn good one.

Very nice.........I too always wanted to fuck one of my nieces.........so sweet a bubble butt and small tits....thanks for the story!

Needs more depth, more details and descriptions of characters. I hope the niece becomes an ass to mouth, anal-gaping cock whore. Great stuff, Thank you

great, looking to read part 2

you took to long to get to the action. you need to get right into to get peoples attention

I have notiticed too much time passes between each of your submissions. Don't leave us hanging on waiting for more it is not fair

Learn how to spell numbers. "I am nineteen years old" reads better than "I am 19 years old", and certainly stay clear of abbreviations like "I am 19 yrs old" when writing literature.

Also, saving a person's stats (she was 19, 5' 7", 120 lbs, and had a 36C-24-36 bod) is distracting. There are sexier ways to describe a person's body!

You may benefit from seeking an editor to scan your writings before you submit.

Best of luck to you.

More, please?