by Eroticalover1968
This started out really well but its gone off the deep end and its complete garbage now. Stop writing give it up.
This is a really hot story, keep up the good work.
Obviously not one of the average "love-romance wins the day" kind of stories. Dysfunctional, emotionally immature and confused alot. Could almost be real world! =P Curious to see if you write any more, if so, put a little more erotic in your erotica and it should be pretty interesting!
I love both the story and style of writing. Hoping they sort out this mess in the next chapte s, though :-)
The story does its job, but I'm disappointed about how abusive Cheryl is. It was okay at first, but now she is totally physically, verbally, and emotionally, abusive. It actually distracts from the story and creates a certain level of uncomfortable, almost violent, themes to the sex scenes as well as the regular scenes. Don't stop writing, just keep that in mind.