All Comments on 'How NOT to Stop a Gangbang'

didn't like it much but I was warned.

Skipped over the brother bit but enjoyed the tale. You write extremely well and it was very funny in parts.

00-Well written but Jesus fucking christ how stupid have you made this woman? You could certainly call this a cautionary tale of how not to so FUCKING stupid. The family and the ex-fiance are well shot of this woman.

Dear !-Yikes and more YIKES!;

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First of all, Anonymous comments are chickenshit. You could at least use your psuedo.

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Second, of course she is stupid. She was designed to be a comic character of the Basil Fawlty, George Castanza variety. She is amoral, self centered, spiteful, mean spirited, short sighted and an all around jerk. I thought it would be fun to create a character like this and let her dig her hole deeper and deeper and deeper until it fell in on her and buried her in her own nastiness. That is <i>exactly</i> the point of this story.

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I don't understand people who get angry when fictional characters make stupid choices. There are some very spiteful, short sighted, stupid people in the world. You should tear yourself away from your mensa group more often. <BR>

One last thing. I debated long and hard (heh heh-long;hard) about throwing out the scene with the brother, but I thought is showed the depths of her viciousness so when the next scene... well, I've said enough.

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As always, thanks for the comments. Sorry if my defense of my intentions was more spirited than polite.

This is a great example of being hoisted on one's own petard.

Boyd

Brilliant story, one ofthe very best.

He says the same thing about any story of this type. Just means his comments are not about your story. His comments are just about him and his own attitudes. And he is chickenshit.

I found myself laughing out loud multiple times at your witticisms, FaS. I pride myself on writing witty dialogue, but I can learn a thing or two from you, my friend! Your character development of the heroine (or does she deserve that moniker?) is truly impressive. While you (enjoyably) pushed the envelope on her amoral and myopic attributes, you gave her an authenticity and genuine likeability with some of her misgivings, fears and tears. Kudos on a job well done! AverageBear from Canada

on other reviewers. Didnt like the concept of the story. Anyone stupid enough to play a joke like that on a girl about to get married deserves HIV.

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I didnt expect that as an ending, but I couldnt stop reading!.. so funny

Incredibly well written, very interesting set up, finale rocks! Actually, it was even a gripping read.

Great job!

Well done f&s, well done indeed. Keep writing, I'll keep reading.

Great story, sorry it ended as sadly as it did. At least she didn't try to keep Chuck from finding out and then marry him anyway. Tokyo is nice in the spring.

Great fun from start to finish. A superb antiheroine and a nasty piece of work!

I never saw the ending coming.

"I turned many pages per minute"

'This book should be on the coffee table of every home in the USA.'

ha ha ha

now write another one why dontch>?????????

FR aka jz

I thought I was reading a Tammy Trueheart story.

I make it a policy not to delete comments, but I just did. The only reason I chose to do so was because the anonymous commenter revealed most of the plot points, including the end. I don't want to seem like someone who cannot stand criticism so here is what Anonymous Commenter said:

I'm stupid, my character is stupid, my plot is stupid. Anonymous did not mention if he/she thought my jokes were lame (since the story is suppose to be funny), but I suspect that is because they lack any kind of sense of humor. I feel bad for them. That must suck.

And once again I would like to point out that anonymous trolling is chickenshit.

I guess because I'm a wife I liked everything but how she likly lost her job and the end. I would have liked it more if she keeps it her dirty little secret and has to vow to forgive her new husband if he ever screws up because of how badly she did or have only her husband figure it out and shock her because he loved what she did.

and written by men or women instead of whatever you are

AS A WHORE..SHE WOULD HAVE DONE SOMETHING LIKE THIS ..AFTER SHE WAS MARRIED TO CHUCK

Loved the twist at the end.

best story ive read all year. thankyou author -x-

I believe you write some of the most realistic and complete characters of any writer on Literotica. I have to say that you have a gift for inserting humor into the story. In this tale, I must confess that while I do enjoy a tragedy, I was actually left feeling sorry for the heroine. Keep writing great stories.

Would love to read a sequel...with as much passion and mixed up confused identities as this one, LOL!

Was the racist stuff need?

Woman was a petty, reactionary skank and got what she deserved. Thought the scenes were hot and honestly felt sorry for her fiancee. Hope he found someone much better than her soon after and she learned her lesson. This is just me, but maybe you could write a sequel for her fiancee where he does find someone better? Really did make me feel for the characters. Once again great story.

I think a lot of you take things too seriously. I found the story very well written and hilarious, reminded me a bit of Stephanie Plum's misadventures. Not too often you get erotica in a humorous vein. A definite 5/5.

Love how you portrayed her and her thoughts... can really see myself in Some of thosesituations! Definetly hope there will be a part about her in Tokyo soon ;-)

In short: loved apmost all of it!

In long... would love to be part of a rough cummy anal and throat story of yours... any chance?

Mail me at busty.jessica.bj at gmail.com

Yeah, it stretched credibility a bit, but it was well told, and the end was great.

Nice job...

I really liked this story and the very imaginative and compact Perils of Pauline style that is so hard to maintain. The writing style was funny and ironic.. Plus you pretty much touched all the bases, filled all the holes and covered all my fantasies and more and got me all slippery!

Very good. Funny erotic it had it all. Far flung isles of langerhan? Hadn't heard that one in awhile!

found this searching......am going to see what else yo may have written

Most of this story was 5 star writing. The only thing that stopped it from getting that rating was the lesbian scene, which seemed gratuitous, and detracted from the overall story. Mind you, there was nothing wrong with the lesbian scene by itself. It just didn't add anything to the plot.

Clever, well written, and so terrifically horrid to the protagonist. When I realized she was going to be walking into the wrong party I had to stop reading for a while out of pity.

Cruel, but she got what she deserved in the end.

Very well written, 5 stars from me.

With the depths of this woman's viciousness, how could anyone take this seriously? Perfect argument for the theory that a protagonist has to be relatable for the story to work. This was not entirely my cup of tea, but it was still a good piece of work. I love your stories, they're more raw than some of the stuff on this website.

I have to say that this is one of the more unusual gangbang stories I have read and I mean that in a good way. The blending of humor had me belly laughing and tears flowing out of my eyes. Add that to the twist of becoming in demand despite her best efforts truly made for a great story and an unexpected ending. Hope to enjoy more of your work.

I not only didn't get disgusted I actually got caught up in the story. I have to admit to being a pervert with a wide interest in all things sexual, but I do so enjoy a good story. Is there any chance of continuing the story in Japan. It could get gloriously raunchy along that line. Keep up the good work.

It's funny how realistic this is, and a how there are people who live like this. But for a story, this was really funny and good.

Welcome to world of the self-destructing bitch, in this case a semi-deserving spoiled one. It was telegraphed from the first few paragraph that she would self-destruct, it only remained to see how and you showed us quite well. With even enough humor that I spewed hot chocolate on my monitor at one image you evoked. (I should know better than to drink and read.)

(I know I'm showing my ignorance here, but what is "atm"? The only usage of the acronym I know has to do with monetary withdrawals.)

Like I said in other comments, I like your work. Keep on writing.

To the previous commenter, ATM stands for Ass to Mouth. When a girl sucks the cock that just came out of her ass.

Nice job. Jokes were hilarious, especially the Asian efficient jokes....

Excellent story, and kudos on the slip of incest in there. For some reason it's always hot in a story

Too funny! Well done!

Very good. Well written - it's not easy to mix funny and fucking. And fast paced, too. Five stars from me.

best humorous story I've read recently.5 well deserved stars!!

I couldn't read the final mishap. It was really good but my conscience kicked in. As horny as I get at times I do want to get married someday and the thought of fucking up that bad... I mean wow. It's still hot, just made me really feel bad.

This is one of the best stories I've read. Your writing style has a nice tempo to it. It didnt read like a 4 page story. I was hoping it was going to be continued when I got to the last page. Thank you for the entertaining story.

I feel sorry for the girl, even though she deserved every bit of it.