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AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Interesting.

PugzillaPugzillaover 1 year ago

Very promising setup. If you are trying to build an audience you should pick a category to post in and post most of your work in that category. I'm mostly an exhibitionist/voyeur guy. I saw the first entry and read it but only saw the second one when you pointed it out to me because I don't check nonconsent that often for new stories.

Zaos1Zaos1over 1 year agoAuthor

@Anonymous, Thanks, i am glad you like it!

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

It’s good but not long enough you should at least put two pages so people don’t loose interest in your story , because it’s already two chapter with not much action when your way to write’s actually very good… I know you want to build tension but on the long run it would no serve you right !

TLMorganTLMorganover 1 year ago

Well this is definitely a slow build up but I'm sure the payoff will be very rewarding :)

Zaos1Zaos1over 1 year agoAuthor

@TLmorgan, thanks, i am glad you like it…. And yes, In the next chapter we are going to see How this PUA is going to use all his skills to expose the Udders of Mariana! 😈

Zaos1Zaos1over 1 year agoAuthor

@Anonymous, thanks, if you liked this first 2 chapters, in the next one we are going to see full action, we are going to see how this PUA is going to use all his skills to expose the Huge Udders of Mariana 😈😈

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