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PugzillaPugzillaover 1 year ago

The slow pace of the story is both frustrating and enjoyable at the same time. I hope the actual payoff is equally as drawn out as the build-up.

Zaos1Zaos1over 1 year agoAuthor

@pugzilla, thanks, i am glad you enjoy the story!!!… would you be open to help me craft the next chapter?? I think the mind of an author with a lot of experience will help a lot to elevate to the Maximum the exposure and humiliation of Mariana 😃

PugzillaPugzillaover 1 year ago

I would. I'm assuming the next chapter is going to be he gets her somewhere more private. Where she might be less self conscious about him helping her with her back issues. I'm not sure the next chapter is where the humiliation starts. This would be where our PUA gets her breasts out for the first time. Use the same slow pace you use in the set up. Be descriptive about the details of her breasts coloring, shape, movement, reaction, feel. For sure counter balance her trust and reluctance with his evil joy of capturing her on camera for public humiliation in the future. I wouldn't let her know she's been tricked in the next entry. Entry four should just be the ex boyfriend finding her video online and finding out she's about to be set up for a live stream. The last entry should be her getting a phone call just as she is being strapped into a piece of chiropractor equipment this traps her. Too late to stop her second unveiling.

Zaos1Zaos1over 1 year agoAuthor

@pugzilla, thank you so much!, this advices has been very hepfull, i am almost finishing the next chapter, i am just going to wait some time for this chapter to generate some more views and comments, and then i am going to release the next :-D

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Looks promising. I am curious and excited to see how the story will plan out. I especially like or would like to see his results based on his skills, quick thinking and persuasion rather than just using items that immediately lead to a result. So that the payoff is even better and greater. And I really like the parts about his desire and motives to expose her.

Very interested in this story !

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Great so far, excited for more!

Zaos1Zaos1over 1 year agoAuthor

@Anonymous 1 and 2, Thanks, i am glad you like the story!!!, He is a professional PUA, yes, of course he is going to use his skills to expose her udders, i think you are going to be delighted to read how he was able to unveil them :-D

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