All Comments on 'How To Seduce a Huge Pair Of Boobs'

I just couldn't get by the noticeable lack of command of the English language.

Story? Leaves a lot to be desired!

Not very good. No descriptions at all...

@Justplainjeff , really is not understandable? that is strange, the author wich i collaborate with this story is an english speaker, and people in devian art could understand the story... I don't understand what could have happened =-/

@Anonymous... "Story? Leaves a lot to be desired!"/ "Not very good. No descriptions at all..."... this is just the first chapter, the introduction, in the upcoming chapters i will bring more details about the girl, about the PUA and other characters, I hope that the next chapters are to your liking

Pretty terrible

You had something going but you kinda ended it too abruptly... Hope the next chapter is a bit longer.

Very difficult to read with all the errors. Get a better editor!

Had to check out this story with a 1.97 rating. It is well deserved. Don't be afraid to read lots of stories here for examples of how to write. Use the self help guides. Good luck. Hard to believe this got published.

@TLMorgan, thanks, yes, this the introduction chapter, where Mariana breaks up with her boyfriend... in the next chapter we can read more details about How the PUA meet her, and what is going to do when he see her huge Pair... if your liked the description and tags, i am sure you are going to enjoy the next chapter :-D

In just the few lines in your comment back to me there were 4 or 5 errors. Please proofread before hitting enter.

@justplainjeff, i see you have a lot of stories in your profile, so i would like to ask you.... would you like to take a look at my chapter 2 to help me with my english before i release it here in literotica??

What story?

@anonymous, are you Jeff? I mean, you have a lot of Writing stories, Or Novels here in Literotica, a lot of experience in writing… for that reason i would like to ask you if you would like to take a look at my chapter 2 of this story I wrote… to correct my English, so could be released with a much better English for everyone.

I think it's a very good start. Short is not a problem if you are productive. I know as an author bad grammar is a deal breaker for much of the audience. I understand it takes them out of the story. But this is a free site and at some point you have to pick between editing and posting. Some of the readers will understand that you need to move on and some will not. I'm kind of in the get the story out there even if it's not perfect camp. Keep the story flowing.