All Comments on 'How Wonderful Ch. 01'

First story or not this is pretty typical stuff. Mark is amoral, apparently not at all reluctant to screw a married woman. He is also well endowed. Well of course, after all, he is black after all! Guilt comes a bit too late, but somehow even getting sick does not keep her away from the scene of the crime. I hope you plan to do more with these characters than the usual bull. Good luck.

get to have a dependable white husband who works 10 to 12 hours a day, so he could help feed and cloth three females, two of whom are his daughters,,, or at least they are from white male sperms... <p>

that leaves the woman/wife/mother not too much time on her hands, with Sharon, the two little daughter, and the big handsome black brother... man, isn't life just so wonderful! <p>

we all hold our breaths, hoping against hope she and Sharon could go on fucking that beautiful brother, to their hearts content, as best friends, and just have the best sex, best life, best of all worlds,,, those "guilt" or "waves of guilt" will diminish mighty soon, honey,,, don't worry about it... and then pure eroticism is all that is left! <p>

LOLLLL! the next time she cries, it'd be because her butt hole's been stuffed with dicks so big, from multiple brothers, with her loving husband saying, "Honey, I can't stand it, when you cry... What's the matter? What can I do? Let me call 911... I know it's your period and you're all bloody... please, let me call for help, my dear beloved... Please... " <p>

of course, with more "erotic" activities with Sharon, some 9 or ten months later, there comes a baby... the husband says it is PROBABLY not his, since it is half black half white and they are both whites! LOL!! <p>

Then, of course, she divorces him and goes to live with Leroy, and then Marc, and then Jamal.. and her life just gets better and better, after each baby is delievered.... No more guilty feelings and endless nights of sex with the biggest black brothers! <p>

What a Wonderful Life it is, yes,,, for those smart, good looking, and deserving! LOL

WHY DO PEOPLE THAT CANT WRITE WILL SOONER OR LATER WRITE ABOUT A BLACK MAN THAT IS HUNG LIKE A HORSE, IS FUCKING A WHITE MARRIED WOMEN. WHAT ARE OUR DAUGHTERS GONNA THINK WHEN THEY READ THIS TYPE OF BULLSHIT, THEY GONNA THINK ITS OK TO GO TO BED WITH A BLACK MAN WITH A 12IN DICK. FOR ONE THING ITS RACIST THINKING THAT ALL BLACK MEN ARE REALLY HUNG. WHEN IN ACTUALLY THERE IS NO DIFFERENCE IN ANY OF THE RACES AVERAGE PENIS SIZE. BUT THE BLACK MEN WHO WANT TO GET THESE MARRIED WHITE WOMEN PREGNANT AND DUMP THIS ASS, ARE TRYING TO CONVICE U DIFFERENT.

Same old crap, vote 0 and skip further submissions from this idiot

Don't let the critics get you down. Your first story is fantastic. You develop it well and your characters have great depth and interactions. You work well with the tensions too. Very erotic story... please continue.

In the end this story could only end in a sad way for all of the characters. I agree with what "Absolutely fantastic!" says; Don't let the critics get you down.

Keep on with the good work!

If instead of starting your writing record with duplicating most tired racial formulas (I fucked him because he was black and therefore had 11 inch of meat'- how erotic is that not) you would have tried to write in your own voice –ANY VOICE, you would have had me 100 percent behind your first effort. But this has been done hundreds of times with minimal changes. Start with something which you have NOT read yourself many times.

i wonder why people think that having sex w/ KIDS around is 'wonderful'? please, at least have some boundaries. i dont care if they have gangbangs everyday, as long as the kids are away. come on people, you leave your little kids outside the house just so you can fuck?

again! If you wish to write, why not try to find some original angle to it. Only then can you distinguish yourself.

Another angle pls, not black men with big cocks, there are 13 to the dozen of those stories!

Heaven help poor Sam, better she dies quickly, this is a shit story I will read no more of your garbage.

You have to read "Naughty High Class Mom" It has everything your story is missing. Older white women with huge 12 inch cock black stud. The problem with your story is that there is no dialogue-just text-making it sounds like a manual. God effort-great plot-to need to bring up the heat with dialogue and description. Expand on this in your next ch. Use more seduction (stockings & heels) Break down the marriage because of his enormous cock.And do read Naught high class mom"

You know you loving reading black on white sex. It has a simple equation Huge black cock= older white pussy. It’s simple you assholes. Read it for what it is. You’re not going to reinvent the wheel with this one. Everyone knows blacks have giant cocks and all white women crave em’. Now go crawl into bed with your puny white 7inch dick and give it to your wife or girlfriend as she fantasies about getting fed a huge black tireless cock!

...news at eleven. This "writer" would be better advised to spend his time collecting stamps or something of the like because he has ZERO skills as a writer.

Whoopee! How original . Naive married woman meets black hunk with 20 inch cock and screws him. It's too bad nobody ever thought of some thing that original before. The only more disgusting part of this story is dragging the kids into the plot. Sad perversion.

the Ct. Yankee

...your storyline. The same old plot has been beaten, trampled or crushed to death so many times it was uncountable - black men with huge dong boning married white women. Honestly it was really a bore. Thank goodness your writing technique was acceptable and decipherable. If your story keep heading towards those a dime a dozen cuck stories then I assure you your writing career will die an untimely death too. You future as a serious author lies precariously now.

Writer - you tried for three[3] hooks which was overkill. Black - 12" cock, - young children. Two of which hurt the story and your credibility.<P>

Door open and young children about - cmon whats arousing about young children watching or wondering about the black uncle[?]?<P>

Next humongous 12" cocks are like 48DDD hangers - sadly sick overkill for what good reason?<P>

Lastly, this is at least so far a story of interracial cucking. Say isn't there category for interracial?<P>

So writer as this is your first effort (here) perhaps this could be a mulligan - however it sounds like a little like a less extravagant more purified version of the black cuck / wimp theme advanced by the unintelligible 3 [needu, wantsie and vastie] sick one's.<P>

Well one can hope it isn't and you aren't, but it's too soon to tell. Your opening comment was not much sex and an implication of an ending on a realistic consequential note or was I / you wrong? As per usual time always tells.<P>

Well written by the way - content-wise so far it is as commented upon much like many others but with 6 [countum 6] chapters more to go anything can happen and will tell us how credible you intend to be henceforth. Hopefully consequentially realistic.

The worst of the phrases you came up with is in a woman only being able to feel "so full" with a big cock. Budster, you apparently never heard of virginity as women are tampon size then and any cock feels so full.

As for the goofy claim that the black knew how to use it, yeah right in your writing all you showed was he was another poke and push boring dork. Too bad Hans you fail again.

This always happens with the big cock worshipping crowds who have never had a big cock. The reality is a big cock does not go in that easy even on bored out mommies. The reality is these women would be in pain and not walking for days without wincing. Big dicks are a pain and when they aren't a pain the women end up getting infections as they are bored out so everything gets in them.

Poor, bad, inept, cliche is not literature or erotica.

children are move faithful then those without or those with older children. Trash is trash, this story is trash, always throw out the trash. Learn a few terms: faithful; loyal; moral; ethical; betrayal; liar; disrespectful; cheating; unfaithful; unloyal; immoral; unethical; respectful; marraige vows; marriage contract; stupid; illogical; meaningless; ignorant; mental illness; STDs; drug resistant STD; HIV; AIDS; child at risk; child abuse. Try putting these words into your story it might come out better.

Here it s another interracial story and the usual comments spring to life. This isn't original, the charactor is going to get HIV or some other horrible STD, why do all black men have big dicks?, the comments are the same old crap once again. The idiotic commentators keep reading these stories as if they expect something to change. I have horrible news for you meatheads, a story in the interracial section will have sex between at least two people of different races and Loving Wives stories are stories about cheating wives (depsite the rantings of some of the really "special" people on this site). I don't understand what you think is going to change within these stories? What would Mr HIV so if someone actually whipped out a condom? Probably shoot himself, not a big loss so we'll move on. What would be the most welcome change to all the normal readers and writers on this site is if you intrusive donkeys stopped leaving your repetitive and useless remarks.

As for the story I thought it was excellent. The writer brought us along without rushing to the sexual encounter which is the basis of a really good story on this site. I'm really looing forward to the next chapter.

the dumb slut got married when she was seventeen and she had to have pregnant. Her husband? was only nineteen and dumb as hell. You are a cheating slut and he is a dumb ass dufus. There should be a law against retartd marring, whait there is...but with so many retards in the world today who notices. You and all your retard friends should be steralized.

The story isn't a stereotypical story yet. I don't know what is going to happen. And this story doesn't revel in the (granted stereotypical) 12 inch black cock. That damn thing is a danger to Mark. Wonder if he ever had a door shut on it? That's another story.

This story isn't one of these ghetto gangsta stories. The friend Sharon is a little over the top. How come she wants to share her lover with the heroine? (we will call her heroine because she is the narrator and she has a problem.)

This story shouldn't turn out to be a cuckld story---maybe a rage story, but maybe not. A good ending, though a dull story perhaps, would be for the heroine to get control of herself,break the habit of visiting Sharon---in fact get rid of her as a friend because she is no friend. What Sharon does with her own pussy is her decision, but she is pandering.

I give the story a 50. Some psychological sensitivity, but some over the top plotting too. The story could be interesting and intelligent or disntegrate into the cuckold or the rage mode. Chapter 2 will tell. Let's play a little Darth Vader music before reading Chapter 2.

but I want to read the next chapter to see and hope that she gets knocked up. Then what will she tell her faithful husband. Oh, I got pregnant sitting on a public toilet seat. Sam will not believe that and when out comes a little black bastard, he should kick her cheating ass out of the house. Let her go back to her loving sister that got her with Mark so Mark can support the bastard. He will disappear in a heartbeat, lol lol.

The story is very hot. The writing is first class. It does not matter if some believe the story is a cliche, black man with a big cock. I have enough black friends to know that this is no cliche. Nonetheless, I cannot believe the number of total assholes on this site who could not write a grammatically correct sentence and are here bashing this story.

I loved this story and am looking forward to read all the subsequent chapters. My only critical comment is that I would like to have a better description of the characters so that I could visualize them. It is difficult for me to get into the story without seeting the characters. There is no need to dump descriptions all in one sentence but if you give us, the reader, bits and pieces of what they look like, then I can be more part of the story.

Ignore the bashers, my friend. You have real talent as a writer. I loved this first chapter.

It is too bad that your period started. You had a perfect opportunity to give your next baby some chocolate milk. Niggers fucking white women should be lynched.

I don't understand where many of the critics are coming from, especially racial biases and moralizing about cheating wives. Hey guys this is supposed to be erotica... some folks get off on this sort of story. Why get all upset that a black guy with a stereotypical horse cock is fucking a MILF? Her husband isn't wimpy -- just clueless. Don't pick a "Loving Wives" story if reading about a wife getting strange cock outrages you! Stick with the "Romance" category.

What makes this story, or at least this installment, less erotic is her wallowing in guilt. I can understand her feeling guilty -- it's just not a turn-on to read about it.

The Tower of Babel was developed to keep the races separate. You have manipulated it and now you suffer. Maybe your husband will take on his responsibility and raise nigga rug crawler as his own?

She would rent to a woman; not a man. Therefore, that is so unrealistic and obviously the intent of the writer is for them to have sex.

Since interracial sex is not my thing, at that point I stopped reading. However, the story is not classified interracial sex. Therefore, since the author mislead, I rated it 1*.

with all the so called big black guy business? It's just stupid. I give it a 1 just for that.

she failed a survey

One indiscretion. A one time mistake can be forgiven. No one is perfect. Let's see what happens...

You really are just a slut writing these stories aren't you?

Can't wait to see where it goes.

believable

did she have time to work 4-5 hours a day? I've read each chapter's "tease line." NO RAAC, PLEASE!!!

You drew me into caring about every character. I expected the sex but it was made all the more interesting by your subtle introduction and slow build. If there had been a blow by blow fifteen paragraph description rather than a telling of the pleasure this would truly have been a run of the mill piece of fiction.

You have a gifted story telling ability. Wish I could introduce this to more readers and have your feedback numbers sore as they should.

Too bad you are not around anymore

Black men have an 85% STD infection rate (CDC), so this marriage and the stupid bitch's busted pussy are gonna need rotsaruck, ha ha.

And why 11-inches? It's such a stupid exaggeration. Even a true 9 is quite rare.

Aside from the blithe stupidity this is written rather well, though one is reluctant to say "bravo" due to the clueless troping.

All women are sluts when they want to be.

Another cheap plot with the hung black guy cucking the unknowing white husband. Oh! She feels so guilty, but can't get it out of her mind. No more.

Put this crap in interracial

More mandingo crap! How wonderful.

Overly libidinous, huge cocked black man and the white woman that's hypnotized by his dick. Fantastic.

Decent build. Fear of pregnancy and the tears which followed were pretty tame as a stereotypical story telling device.

Thanks for sharing.

Call CPS. These women don't need to have pets, much less children.

As an NP in an OB-GYN practice, most women cannot take an 11" penis. Women have come in with all kinds of injuries mainly from real penises, because women using large toys can better control the depth, force, and angle of penetration. Last week a woman came in requiring stitches, which one of the staff doctors performed. Her story was that her partner used a large rubber phallus (Okay, a dildo!) on her, but she also had an STD panel done, too. So...

Anyway, that's why these stories are always so ridiculous. I'm an average woman of 5'6" and 140 pounds but I have a fairly small vagina and uterus. My husband is a bit over 6" and he's all I can handle most of the time. I guess that since most porn is written by men, we'll have to live with size queens and all that other stuff, though it would be nice to read some realistic fare.