by DarkWolfKnight7
This was very good. Great start and end to this chapter. (I so hope there is more) The grammar and flow where great until you go to the part where they where talking to each other. Your " started and end in the wrong spots it was hard to tell inner talk versus outer talk. Thank you for share and more please.
Mechmanas@aol
Great story. Everything is flowing together just right. Please continue on with the series and the good work.
Great Start to you story.
I look forward to reading the rest.
Thanks