All Comments on 'Hurricane Matthew Ch. 01'

so far so good, but are you gonna finish this tale or not?

Seems like you stopped in the middle of the story. Wish there was more than that bit.

Where is it, what hapend to the story did someone lose it?

This is not even a good teaser. You need to make a chapter a lot longer.

Can't have a jerk story without copious

Chapter 2........submitted. Keep your comments cumming.

Sorry to say but i was bored stupid, theres nothing here that entices me backnfor any more, besides this chapter was so short ......

Like the start but you could have the Characters further along then they are. But still it was a Good Read.

You should look at posting multiple pages instead of multiple very short chapters. Character development needs to be done.

If this were done in multiple pages, I might read more. With what I've read for one "chapter" I'll not read any more.

The name of the thing is the mons Veneris, not Venires - the genetive case of Venus

Ironically, for someone using so many 'big' words and phrases, all 3 parts of this story have annoying, grammatically incorrect or mis-spelt words & punctuation.

I also agree that it would have been better to submit this as one story, rather than 3 short chapters.

Your english grammar isn't the best