All Comments on 'I Have My Two Moms'

Pretty good story until I hit the name Amanda. Looks like a storyline error. Probably should proofread.

Who in the fuck is Amanda?

What was the writer smoking when he wrote this crap?

This is a TBC right? Edit Edit Edit and proof read.

Who taught you how to write you damn idiot? Try harder on part 2 .

story and writing.

Which is a pity, because it had great potential. It jumped around too much, with things happening with no prior lead in. It actually read like a sequel, because it felt like the writer assumed that the reader had all the same information as he did, as if we knew who everyone was before we started, so everything just happened as if we should know what was coming. It just jumped straight to the kid saying everything was set up to fuck his two moms, and they were expecting it, with no history given, with no indication that he had ever thought about them before. And then it ended. He didn't even fuck them. To short, too abrupt and nothing happened.

Just an average story. AA++