by Bhob
Very nicely done. Especially after we got through all of the family relationships that existed. That not withstanding..........it was very well done.
Charlie
You know the only thing that (un)dampened my spirits reading this?
Your comments about going for an hour with foreplay... then an hour fucking (yawn).
After I've come three, four, five times, if a guy hasn't reached climax, I think I'd feel inadequate. But, hey that's just me LOL
A brilliantly written story and HOT sex scene. I can't wait to read more of your stories.
Your description of Trish's body was very erotic . . . ie. "flawless" skin, "flat" belly. I also liked the part where you reached down to grasp her butt and run your finger along her cunt which engulfed your shaft, scooping up some juices. I wish you would more fully describe her breasts, which you obviously liked . . . things like "creamy white," or tiny blue veins running up the heavy tubular sides", etc. I liked the intro with you and Trish in bed as five years old. Set the stage nicely. A bit much on the description of family etc. Shorten the story a bit and you have a classic. I also agree about the "hour of foreplay" etc. A bit OT.
What I loved about the story was that it was't just written about sex, there was so much description and thought in it that it really became something else.
Totally believable and I liked all the detail and lead in to Trisha and him finally uniting. Only thing is that it's like you gave up a little on the conclusion: you had all that great detail about how they were separated, all the explanation about the double dates, then the wonderful joining. Relative to the rest of the story, the ending could have been longer. Otherwise though, a great read. :)