All Comments on 'I Needed That Ch. 01'

and then go back to the wimp stuff??

This seems a great story, but it really depends on chapter 2.

Don't bother with another chapter if this is going to be more of the same crap 'my wife doesn't understand me so I have to fuck the neighbour who does'. The story would be better focused on how you repair such a relationship rather than adding a slut to the mix

Please get an editor and learn the difference between 'than' & 'then'. Otherwise, I loved it. It's well over a week, where is the follow-up?

Ican't wait for chapter 2.

Contriplation? A spelling dictionary costs only a few bucks. Your word processor probably incorporates one for free. Were you looking for "contemplation"?

You also consistently used "than" where you should have used "then".

And of course, half way through the story, the husband's name changed from Kyle to Jim.

The storyline was dull, the characters wooden and the spelling and grammar atrocious. Please tell me you are going to let one of Literotica's fine volunteer editors look at the (God help us) next chapter in this tale.

Eric

It started okay... the conversation I think I read half way through. Totally ruined an otherwise good story.

They've fucked... 'oh baby I wanted you to see and taste my tits'

'oh baby, I wanted to turn but you wouldn't let me...'

pfft I hope the next chapter is more to life and not like something you'd watch on the Brady Bunch!

Very interesting and well written, I loved it.

However, certainly what his wife would want to hear, that is not a conversation that could really occur. Therefore, I could only rate it 3***.

So far, so good.

This was bad, especially from an experienced writer. Embarrassing.