All Comments on 'I Saw What I Wanted'

....check your grammar before submitting, please. "As I squeezed her ass, she pulled mine in closer, grinding her crotch against my hard cock. I could feel you moan."

her, or you?

Otherwise OK.

The story didn't seem to have any story line or lead up. One of the best things about this genre is the build up, the way that characters slowly reveal themselves in erotic ways for others to watch. Maybe it would be a bit better with a bit of a teasing introduction then jumping straight in to the hard stuff?? Just a suggestion. :) Other than that- very erotic.