by king_wesley
I agree. More chapters are needed. In SAW he took a protege. What kind of Protege would Michelle find? What are her dark sexual secrets? What if someone turned he tables on her?
ending of chapter one...have you seen the FIVE Saw movies? Same thing. =]
made me feel like jigsaw had a horny protege but still i loved every slow creeping second of it
you ruined it by not giving a description of what happans to the girls
The code to the device. The puppet said key words in each of the speeches. Angel, Lights, etc. At the third one, it said to look inside yourself. I'll bet a slip of paper or something with half the name written on it was stuffed inside Girl A's butt and Jade's vagina. The holes that would not be penetrated.
Still needs a description of what happened afterward. I like visualizing the sybians violating them, particularly Jade's butt.
I would have loved this story had it explained what happened to the girls. I hope the author considers continuing with this series.