All Comments on 'Ice Cubes'

You use words such as torture, sadist and punishment to create sexual tension. They seem out of place. As I read this, I get a feeling of caring, playfulness and intensity. I like my interpretation of your work.

I agree with the prior comment. But worth reading for the details

I too am in agreement with the other people that have commented. There was certainly tension but that is often part of a playful scene and although ice cubes are very very cold I would not deem them torture. It would be more torturous if he was using candle wax followed by ice but he wasn't. This was a good description of a scene that occur in many relationships and there was no sadism here. Having to wait with some sensory deprivation is not out of place and builds up to the end result which both parties want. Sure she may be punished for moving and spilling the ice from her stomach and cumming without permission but this Dom or Master orchestrated it to be this way.

Thank you guys for your criticism and thoughts on this piece of work. It's one of my longer pieces with a lot more detail than I usually do. You gys are totally correct thinking I use words like "torture" playfully. The relationship I was trying to portray was loving and caring and fun, I'm really glad you guys saw that. Thank you <3

Is there a second part???