All Comments on 'Identical Twins and Father Ch. 03'

Only 4 snorts in the story? I feel ripped off.

Once again, full of him, and he, and she, and her, leaving the reader to guess who the fuck is talking to who - you can't write dialog, you've been told this repeatedly, why do you persist in coming back and taking up space that could have been usefully employed by a writer with talent, ability, vision, style or sense of humor, none of which you possess? - please go away and stop posting, your stuff gives me an acute attack of the shits